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Post by Deleted on Sept 14, 2014 18:16:22 GMT -6
Name: hadeskid
Class:pupil Age:16 Born in:Etruria Appearance:he has short messy hair and brown eyes as well as a few freckles here and there.his body is slightly out of shape and lightly pale from constantly being indoors.he wears A dark red tunic trimmed in brown with white pants and a brown hood. Personality:Somewhat shy and timed from limited social interaction, but willing to be brave if the time calls for it. Story:Growing up hadeskid had a very sheltered childhood. His father died before he was born and he never knew his older brother, so his mother thought that keeping him near and at home could keep him from a similar fate. In order to keep him entertained his mother would tell him stories of her time working as a Mage for a noble house with filled hadeskid's head with the dream of traveling across the world and seeing all the sights it had to offer, so one day he took his mom's basic fire tome and sent off into the world, only to find out he had a slight fear of people.
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Post by Richter Abend on Sept 19, 2014 14:58:27 GMT -6
The name "hadeskid" does not work for this site. Please trying creating an actual name for your character.
You also need to work on the formatting of your profile. You're missing a lot of capital letters, poor spacing, and have a bizarre line break right after "he wears".
The content isn't terrible, but it's very, very limited. Etruria has a very unique political situation with the Prophet at its head, and your profile addresses none of that. How did his father die? Was it in Kraft's takeover? What happened to his older brother? Is he dead?
Please put a little more effort into this.
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