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Eryxx
Dec 2, 2011 16:20:08 GMT -6
Post by at7commando on Dec 2, 2011 16:20:08 GMT -6
Name: Eryxx
Class: Nomad
Hair Color: Purple
Eye Color: Light Blue
Age: 27
Appearance: White, Average Weight and Height.
Clothes: Green clothing, brown pants, dark brown hunting boots and gloves, light brown bandoliers and shoulderpads.
Born in: Sacae
Story: Eryxx was born in one of the Tribes in Sacae.. until around 22 the tribe had been destroyed by bandits... afterward to which he hunted and killed the bandits that did the deed... but with no where to go... all he has done for the past 5 years is hunt and kill bandits... and has had not much communication with the cities besides for supplies.
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Valorian
Sage
[M:-1030]
Where there is life, there is hope.
Posts: 484
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Eryxx
Dec 2, 2011 22:40:06 GMT -6
Post by Valorian on Dec 2, 2011 22:40:06 GMT -6
Umm..
Hmm, there is nothing wrong with it per say, but it is a little weak. What was his family, his tribe? Did he have siblings? Could any of them have survived? How did he learn archery? Etc etc.
Flesh it out a little bit more. Add a little depth to him.
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Eryxx
Dec 2, 2011 23:19:35 GMT -6
Post by Richter Abend on Dec 2, 2011 23:19:35 GMT -6
No Eryxx, you are the bandits.
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Hal
Soldier
Wings of Courage
I've got 99 problems and Elesia caused every one.
Posts: 215
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Profile: Hal Kailas
OoC Alias: Kenshin
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Eryxx
Dec 5, 2011 7:41:07 GMT -6
Post by Hal on Dec 5, 2011 7:41:07 GMT -6
*Cough*Kenshinripoff*cough*
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Wyatt
Hero
The Volcano
How can someone win if winning means that someone loses?
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Eryxx
Dec 5, 2011 10:40:18 GMT -6
Post by Wyatt on Dec 5, 2011 10:40:18 GMT -6
To be fair, if that was all Kenshin's story was then I don't think there was much to rip off.
Not like Kenny was the most original anyway.
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Eryxx
Dec 5, 2011 16:40:00 GMT -6
Post by Dee Krisby on Dec 5, 2011 16:40:00 GMT -6
No, I'm thinking he's more like Dirk than Kenshin.
Nomad, after all.
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Hal
Soldier
Wings of Courage
I've got 99 problems and Elesia caused every one.
Posts: 215
Bern Fame: 1
Lycia Fame: 1
Affinity: Light
Profile: Hal Kailas
OoC Alias: Kenshin
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Eryxx
Dec 7, 2011 2:43:05 GMT -6
Post by Hal on Dec 7, 2011 2:43:05 GMT -6
Dirk didn't seem very driven for revenge for the death of his people.
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Eryxx
Dec 7, 2011 14:13:40 GMT -6
Post by Nayru Al-Saiduq on Dec 7, 2011 14:13:40 GMT -6
Dude, that's just how dark troubled antiheroes work - they're always looking for revenge on [someone] for [something].
[archenemy] [eating their toast]
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